The American Dream - Comment Thread

[Texashawk (OP)]

Hello Aurorites(?)

Thank you for allowing me to be a part of your incredible game and world. My name is Steve Hawkins, and as I am a new writer to the world of Aurora, any comments/advice/witty rejoinders would be fantastic!!

Thanks for your interest in my fiction!

Steve

[backstab]

Nothing like a good nuclear war to start a game with ! looking good !

[Texashawk (OP)]

Thank you BS!! I was thinking it was a little cliche, myself, but as I started to write the prologue it just seemed right. Plus, most people aren't going to wade through 20-30 pages of expository before any game action happens, so I had to accelerate the plot a bit.

Hope you keep reading!

Steve

[Venec]

You hooked me up, looking forward to updates :)

[Shinanygnz]

Talk about not making it easy for yourself.  A nuclear war leaving the world a blasted ruin and a TN start (yes?).  Hope you get off Earth before everybody dies  :D

Stephen

[Beersatron]

I am liking it.

One question, you are using the designation 'Prime' for some characters. Where is that from? I am wracking my brain because it is a fairly unique way of ranking and I could have sworn I have seen it in a novel before.

[Texashawk (OP)]

Thank you all for your interest!!

Beers... nothing particular; though perhaps the 'Souls in the Great Machine' trilogy might have had an influence. But probably just my subconscious working over lots and lots and lots of sci-fi that I've read and seen.  

Steve

[Beersatron]

I think it was this novel I am thinking about: http://www.fantasticfiction.co.uk/s/e-e ... primes.htm

I have it in paperback back home in Northern Ireland but don't have it here in Houston with me. Think I can get it on Project Guttenberg through Stansa on the iPod Touch.

[Beersatron]

Liking the new additions, particularly liking the memos in all-caps and the level of detail in the headers/email-cc-list etc

I am also impressed that you are rp'ing it to the point of designing and constructing a ship that is only good for morale! How are you factoring that into the actual stats of Earth, I wasn't aware you could SM morale?

Keep it up! :)

[Texashawk (OP)]

Liking the new additions, particularly liking the memos in all-caps and the level of detail in the headers/email-cc-list etc

I am also impressed that you are rp'ing it to the point of designing and constructing a ship that is only good for morale! How are you factoring that into the actual stats of Earth, I wasn't aware you could SM morale?

Keep it up!

Thanks for coming back Beersatron!!

Yeah, I'm one for the detail - I love the amount of detail the Aurora engine gives you, so I figure... why not?

As for morale, honestly it's more of a RP thing. One issue with a CN start is that there is really very little going on before you send up your first ship is that the narrative can be a little... dry. Since I already had the background of a ruined planet, I wanted to give the feeling that the world is on the brink of collapse unless humanity sees some sort of 'guiding light'. I do have a lot of unrest (due to the nuclear fallout) but my ground troops are holding that back. No specific morale bonuses are implied or given, though I do think that would be a cool additional bit of RP use!!

[procyon]

Excellent story.  Don't have much of an idea of how Aurora works, but you don't need to for your fiction.  
Keep up the great work.   Definitely going to become one I check every time I drop by the site.

[StratPlayer]

Wow, excellent work!!!

I'm really enjoying the story!  You've done a fabulous job with the characerizations and highlighting the dramatic elements of the scenes.  I like the mix of methods -- scenes, memos, news-stories, reports, etc.  All used to great effect to concisely move the story and highlight the  drama and conflict.  Focusing on the drama and the role-playing really makes this effective -- much more so than a dry yearly list of events, as in a typical AAR, in my opinion.

Fabulous stoty-telling!  I look forward to reading more!

[Garfunkel]

Good start, Texashawk. Too bad it died