First off, who said she was believing what he says? :wink:
Beersatron hit on a good point as to why she is fascinated by what Jason is saying. It is more a fascination with the story, and not so much belivability. Think of it this way, we read and listen to stories with rapt attention, but that does not mean we believe it to be true.
One of the major reasons she is listening so passionately is for the same reason folks fall in love with their saviors. I cannot remember what it is called, but it involves some sort of emotional transference. So any information she can get on him she will listen to with intensity. :D
I think that you need to show this. Does she listen with rapt attention but keep her kids behind her? Maybe give her a few "tells" to show that she's nervous.
Also, I didn't see anything to show that she was feeling that way toward Gunny.
Vickers is an Air Force General, actually. :D
Then who the heck is an Army Ranger? Is it Gunny? If so, you have to do a search and replace on that last segment since you use Marine throughout.
@ Beersatron, yup, she does not know what most of what he said means, but just listening to the story is fascinating to her.
Maybe have the conversation interspersed with an activity. Thus, have it while walking her to her quarters and/or showing her the base mess. It might give more opportunity to show reactions. Also remember that Jason's gotta be a bit nervous about her too.